TMGT 7142 ASSIGNMENT 1 – VER 3.0 FEBRUARY 27, 2013 – DE – MARKER-LED DELIVERY TMGT 7142 Module 1 Assignment 1 TMGT 7142 Assignment 1 is due at the end of Module 1. Section 1 The following sentences and short passages lack compactness, simplicity, or clarity, and particularly contain low-information-content (LIC) expressions. Improve them by deleting unnecessary words, or by partial or complete rewriting. 1. A power outage disrupted work for a period of 4 hours and 13 minutes on January 7, 2013. 2. For your information, it was decided by the executive committee that a sum in the amount of $180 000 should be set aside for the purpose of implementing building improvements in 2013. 3. It is with considerable concern that we have noticed a large number of discrepancies between the projected and actual expenditures for 2012. 4. Any attempt to operate the engine in excess of 1500 rpm is likely to result in and be the cause of accelerated bearing failure. Section 2 The following sentences offer choices between words that sound similar or are frequently misused. Select the correct word in each case. 1. Three attempts were made to (elicit/illicit) a response from station K-2. 2. Fuel consumption is (affected/effected) by driving speed. 3. Analyses of the data (is/are) being delayed until all the data (has/have) been received. 4. The (principal/principle) reason for analyzing the materials at this stage is to avoid future problems. Section 3 Rewrite the following sentences to make them more emphatic (in many cases, change them from the passive to active voice). Create a “doer” if one is not identified. 1. The fracture of the rotor arm was first noticed by Jan Wright. 2. Although Whistler Mountain’s Olympic Station was obscured by fog for 24 hours, work by the crew repairing the chairlift continued throughout the night. 3. Safety boots and hardhats are to be worn by all technicians working within 100 metres of the construction tower. TMGT 7142 ASSIGNMENT 1 – VER 3.0 FEBRUARY 27, 2013 – DE – MARKER-LED DELIVERY Section 4 Improve the parallelism in the following sentences. 1. Today, the importance of measuring and monitoring our environment is becoming increasingly critical as our population expands, land values appreciate, natural resources dwindle, and the land, water, and air are polluted by human activities. 2. Never before has so much survey data been available for assessing current conditions, making sound planning decisions, and for a study of how policy can be formulated for various resource development, and environmental preservation initiatives. 3. Geodetic methods are employed to determine relative positions of widely spaced monuments, as well as computing lengths and directions of the long lines between them. Section 5 Abbreviate the terms shown in italics in the following sentences. In some cases you will also have to express numerals in the proper form. 1. Vibration became severe at speeds above 84 kilometres per hour, which forced us to drive more slowly than anticipated. However; this enabled us to achieve a fuel consumption of 6.4 litres per 100 kilometres. 2. Radio station DMON’s two operating frequencies are 88.1 kilohertz and 103.6 megahertz. 3. Paragraph three on page seven of the proposal quoted an additional six hundred and fiftyseven dollars ($657.00), tax included, for repairing the damage to the roof caused by Hurricane Hazel. Section 6 Correct any of the following sentences that are not complete or have not been punctuated properly. 1. Progressive corrosion inside the pipes has reduced liquid flow by 21% since 2009. A condition which, if not corrected, could cause system shutdown in less than 12 months. 2. When the digital exchange was installed at Multiple Industries, eight lines were left unused for anticipated staff expansion. Also for providing dedicated lines for a planned facsimile transmission network between branches. 3. The overhead steam pipe ruptured at 10:10 a.m., fortunately the office was empty as everyone had gone down to the cafeteria for coffee break. Although damage was effected to the computer equipment and oak furniture. Section 7 Select the correctly spelled words among the choices offered below. 1. The preface to a book or report is sometimes called a (forward/foreward/foreword). 2. Version 6.0 of 4Tell for Windows 95 (supercedes, supersedes) version 5.5. TMGT 7142 ASSIGNMENT 1 – VER 3.0 FEBRUARY 27, 2013 – DE – MARKER-LED DELIVERY 3. To a young business owner seeking a cash flow loan, the (colatteral/collatteral/collateral) demanded by the bank may seem (exhorbitant/exorbitant). 4. Silica gel is a drying agent, or (desiccant/dessiccant/dessicant), that is packed with electronic equipment before shipment. 5. After (lengthy/lengthly) deliberation, the executive committee admitted that Ken Wynne ‘5 innovative design was indeed (ingenious/ingenuous). Section 8 Applying Reader Access Techniques INSTRUCTIONS In most assignments you will be writing or speaking to an audience of your peers or someone in a senior position. In other words, your audience is NOT a BCIT Instructor. Therefore, you can assume that adience analysis will be a critical component of the evaluation process of your communication success in these assignments. Rewrite the material on the following page using proper Memorandum format. You are required to demonstrate your understanding and ability to use READER ACCESS concepts and effective technical writing techniques learned in “Communication Basis”. Please note: It is not necessary to add or subtract from the ideas contained in the example given. MEMORANDUM TO: All Department Heads SUBJECT: New Copy Procedures A recent study of our copy center request procedures indicates that we are not fulfilling copy requests as efficiently as possible. A number of problems surfaced in the survey. First, many requests, particularly large orders, are submitted before the copy center opens. Others are submitted after the copy center closes. As a result, the copy center has an enormous backlog of copy orders to fill before it can begin copy orders submitted after 8:30 A.M., when the center officially opens. This backlog may through the center two or three hours behind schedule. All copy requests throughout the day then require over two hours to complete. By 2:00 P.M., any copy requests submitted may not be filled that day. If large order arrive unexpectedly even a routine copy request may take two days to complete. To remedy the situation, we will change to the following copy request procedure beginning Monday, February 3. The copy center will close at 3:00 every afternoon. Two work-study employees will work at the center from 3:00 until 5:00 to complete all orders by 4:00. If you submit copy requests by 3:00, the center will have them ready by 4:00. In short, all requests will be filled the day they are submitted. TMGT 7142 ASSIGNMENT 1 – VER 3.0 FEBRUARY 27, 2013 – DE – MARKER-LED DELIVERY However, do not leave copy requests after 3:00, as these will not be processed until the following day. However, we guarantee that if you leave your request for copies with us between 8:30 and 3:00, you will have them that day. Requests for copies of large orders – over 100 copies of one item, single multiple copies of any document over 25 pages, of front/back photocopying of one item up to 50 copieswill require that a notice be given the copy center one day in advance. That way, the center can prepare for your copy request and be sure to have it ready for you. Copies of the request form are attached. Please complete one of these and send it to Lynda Haynes at the copy center so that she can schedule all big jobs. If you submit a big copy request without having complete the form, your request will be completed after other requests are complete. Allow plenty of time for routine jobs- at least two hours, and three if possible. Beginning February 3, give all copy requests to the receptionist at your office number. Be sure you attach complete instructions. Give your name, your phone number, and your office number. State the number of copies required and any special instructions. Specify staples or clips, color paper, and collation on multipage copies. Pick-up procedures also change February 3. All copy jobs, after they are complete, will be placed in each department’s mail box. No copies will be left outside the copy center after closing time. No copies will be left with the receptionist. Large orders that will not fit mailboxes will be delivered to your office. If you have any questions about this new procedure, please contact Lynda Haynes at 2257.